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Aug 4, 2016 8:12 PM
#51
Forgot to say, but yeah, MWB didn't detect anything elsewhere. So even if it's a trojan...probably inactive/defective. |
Aug 4, 2016 10:27 PM
#52
Well, I tried scanning the file with an anti-virus, and it always ends up removing the exe file of the game. I also tried building the game in a Mac computer then scanning it in Windows, but I still got the same warnings. So right now, I will think of those are false alerts. Where the anti-virus thinks the game itself is a virus :o |
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Aug 5, 2016 12:01 AM
#53
SweetMonia said: Stand_Alone_Void said: Ahaha~, nice ^^Well this is the first VN that I played >_< And I have to say that I liked it I think I only saw 1 or 2 minor grammar mistakes but other than that The music was nice Also the story line was easy to follow :D Could you tell me what these grammar mistakes are? That will help me avoid them in the future :> I think I have even more confident in writing stories now after reading that, thank you ^^ First one Sophie said: I will wait you right her When you meant: I will wait for you right here Second one Male student 4 said: I will look for him in near the staircase You meant: I will look for him near the staircase |
Aug 5, 2016 7:21 AM
#54
Okay, here I go... I just skimmed it, so bear with me xP 1) http://i.imgur.com/8BiOzJe.png 'Free time' ? 2) http://i.imgur.com/cPv6BlY.png I'd rather say 'all over her' 3) http://i.imgur.com/rGZSWJH.png Not sure about this one^^ Either "I'll look for him in the staircase nearby" or "I'll look for him near the staircase" 4) http://i.imgur.com/o3TLPV9.png 'Events in this story happen in Miémorrina, .....' 5) http://i.imgur.com/w9ccpiN.png 'There are not many people' ... and I'd probably change it into 'I guess we can go and hide there' ? 6) http://i.imgur.com/9wFTXMc.png http://i.imgur.com/1Inyg8z.png You shouldn't use nice that often x) You look good in our uniform; She looks cute She looks nice doesn't sound nice at all xP 7) http://i.imgur.com/EwIpHCr.png 'Miss Sapphire' (I'd write it in capitals) 8) Forgot to make a screenshot xDD Well, the first time you said that Sophie often has to hide her character~ I'd change that into identity^^ 9) There are some other funny phrasings^^ Like Lolita asking herself "I can hear something" "What's all this commotion" You could change that into something like "It's so noisy >.<" "What's all this commotion about?" |
Aug 5, 2016 3:07 PM
#55
I'm not much into VN but I'll review it if I download it. |
Niet. |
Aug 5, 2016 7:55 PM
#56
Stand_Alone_Void said: Thank you for telling me about those, I will try to be more careful about them :>SweetMonia said: Stand_Alone_Void said: Well this is the first VN that I played >_< And I have to say that I liked it I think I only saw 1 or 2 minor grammar mistakes but other than that The music was nice Also the story line was easy to follow :D Could you tell me what these grammar mistakes are? That will help me avoid them in the future :> I think I have even more confident in writing stories now after reading that, thank you ^^ First one Sophie said: I will wait you right her When you meant: I will wait for you right here Second one Male student 4 said: I will look for him in near the staircase You meant: I will look for him near the staircase |
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Aug 5, 2016 7:55 PM
#57
Mochigi said: Thank you Mochi, I studied them few times, and I will try to avoid those in the future :3Okay, here I go... I just skimmed it, so bear with me xP 1) http://i.imgur.com/8BiOzJe.png 'Free time' ? 2) http://i.imgur.com/cPv6BlY.png I'd rather say 'all over her' 3) http://i.imgur.com/rGZSWJH.png Not sure about this one^^ Either "I'll look for him in the staircase nearby" or "I'll look for him near the staircase" 4) http://i.imgur.com/o3TLPV9.png 'Events in this story happen in Miémorrina, .....' 5) http://i.imgur.com/w9ccpiN.png 'There are not many people' ... and I'd probably change it into 'I guess we can go and hide there' ? 6) http://i.imgur.com/9wFTXMc.png http://i.imgur.com/1Inyg8z.png You shouldn't use nice that often x) You look good in our uniform; She looks cute She looks nice doesn't sound nice at all xP 7) http://i.imgur.com/EwIpHCr.png 'Miss Sapphire' (I'd write it in capitals) 8) Forgot to make a screenshot xDD Well, the first time you said that Sophie often has to hide her character~ I'd change that into identity^^ 9) There are some other funny phrasings^^ Like Lolita asking herself "I can hear something" "What's all this commotion" You could change that into something like "It's so noisy >.<" "What's all this commotion about?" |
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Aug 5, 2016 7:56 PM
#58
Sealuck said: Okay, take your time! You can always catch up to it whenever you feel like too.I'm not much into VN but I'll review it if I download it. Thank you Maidenu Heartu~ |
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Aug 5, 2016 9:37 PM
#59
Update:- For those who don't want or can't install the games from the link in the opening post, like those who are on mobile, you can watch the game from this video now:- |
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Aug 6, 2016 1:42 AM
#60
SweetMonia said: Sealuck said: Okay, take your time! You can always catch up to it whenever you feel like too.I'm not much into VN but I'll review it if I download it. Thank you Maidenu Heartu~ How do you know my deepest secret? Are you omniscient? |
Niet. |
Aug 6, 2016 3:25 AM
#61
Aug 6, 2016 5:31 AM
#62
Bossu finally finished her game! >> I'll make sure to download\finish it today ^^ |
Aug 6, 2016 12:07 PM
#63
Awesome VN Monia!! The art and music are perfectt Just some grammar issues I found... (sorry to be so nit picky >w<) You could write "There a tons of middle-class people who live a more normal life too." Or "There a tons of middle-class people who live more normal lives too." This could be "a 12 year old middle-schooler." But I think either way is still correct. ^w^ This one could be "something interesting I have never done before." or "something we have never done before." "If anyone asks," since it hasn't happened yet. Use "especially" rather than "specially." "especially" is used to emphasise something notable whilst, "specially' is used to emphasise a distinctive purpose. Here's an example I found/ used [url=http://englishplus.com/grammar/00000287.htm[/url] :3 "I feel like I've seen her before." This is referring to something in the past so use past tense. ^U^ Love the VN so far, best of luck for the rest of it <3 |
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Aug 6, 2016 7:51 PM
#64
Sealuck said: Haha, maybe. But your auras are all about being a maiden :DSweetMonia said: Sealuck said: I'm not much into VN but I'll review it if I download it. Thank you Maidenu Heartu~ How do you know my deepest secret? Are you omniscient? |
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Aug 6, 2016 7:51 PM
#65
Vaenny said: No, it is not a full visual novel, though I didn't think I should do anything like that. :>Quick question: have you recorded the game info at VNDB yet? |
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Aug 6, 2016 7:52 PM
#66
Nice! I hope you like what I created, dear Kou~ :> |
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Aug 6, 2016 7:57 PM
#67
Kishmare said: Yaay, I am very glad to hear that. ^^Awesome VN Monia!! The art and music are perfectt Just some grammar issues I found... (sorry to be so nit picky >w<) You could write "There a tons of middle-class people who live a more normal life too." Or "There a tons of middle-class people who live more normal lives too." This could be "a 12 year old middle-schooler." But I think either way is still correct. ^w^ This one could be "something interesting I have never done before." or "something we have never done before." "If anyone asks," since it hasn't happened yet. Use "especially" rather than "specially." "especially" is used to emphasise something notable whilst, "specially' is used to emphasise a distinctive purpose. Here's an example I found/ used [url=http://englishplus.com/grammar/00000287.htm[/url] :3 "I feel like I've seen her before." This is referring to something in the past so use past tense. ^U^ Love the VN so far, best of luck for the rest of it <3 And grammar corrections are welcome, I will try my best to avoid them in any upcoming releases. Here are my replies to the mistakes you referred to:- :) You could write "There a tons of middle-class people who live a more normal life too." Or "There a tons of middle-class people who live more normal lives too." I am not sure why the "are" should be omitted, but I corrected the extra "a" in my current script, nice find This could be "a 12 year old middle-schooler." But I think either way is still correct. ^w^ I think years is correct :> This one could be "something interesting I have never done before." or "something we have never done before." Right, the second one you mentioned seems better, as Lolita is talking about both her & Sophie "If anyone asks," since it hasn't happened yet. Wow, good one!!! Use "especially" rather than "specially." "especially" is used to emphasise something notable whilst, "specially' is used to emphasise a distinctive purpose. Here's an example I found/ used [url=http://englishplus.com/grammar/00000287.htm[/url] :3 Will do! I got to read that article after I reply too :D "I feel like I've seen her before." This is referring to something in the past so use past tense. ^U^ Again, good find :D |
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Aug 6, 2016 8:03 PM
#68
downloaded, will play in the morning |
Aug 6, 2016 8:05 PM
#69
jimanator said: Yay, I will be waiting for your feedback then :Ddownloaded, will play in the morning |
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Aug 6, 2016 8:18 PM
#70
SweetMonia said: Vaenny said: No, it is not a full visual novel, though I didn't think I should do anything like that. :>Quick question: have you recorded the game info at VNDB yet? Why not? It seems like a good idea. It's good publicity, at least. |
Aug 7, 2016 12:09 AM
#71
Vaenny said: I agree, but I thought it was not a final novel, so I didn't do it. I will seriously consider adding it there :DSweetMonia said: Vaenny said: Quick question: have you recorded the game info at VNDB yet? Why not? It seems like a good idea. It's good publicity, at least. |
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Aug 7, 2016 12:28 AM
#72
Kishmare said: Awesome VN Monia!! The art and music are perfectt Just some grammar issues I found... (sorry to be so nit picky >w<) And grammar corrections are welcome, I will try my best to avoid them in any upcoming releases. Here are my replies to the mistakes you referred to:- :) You could write "There a tons of middle-class people who live a more normal life too." Or "There a tons of middle-class people who live more normal lives too." I am not sure why the "are" should be omitted, but I corrected the extra "a" in my current script, nice find Gah sorry about the "are" it was 4 am, so I kind of missed some letters >w< |
Aug 7, 2016 5:21 AM
#73
SweetMonia said: Perhaps when it's done then. Looking forward to the full build!Vaenny said: I agree, but I thought it was not a final novel, so I didn't do it. I will seriously consider adding it there :DSweetMonia said: Vaenny said: No, it is not a full visual novel, though I didn't think I should do anything like that. :>Quick question: have you recorded the game info at VNDB yet? Why not? It seems like a good idea. It's good publicity, at least. |
Aug 7, 2016 5:26 AM
#74
I finished it, I loved the music choice, and the characters were super cute It was short, but I expected it to be (since you were the only one working on it) ^^ there were a few grammar mistakes, though not going to point them out since I'm pretty sure someone already did ^^ Other than that, I really liked it I thought it was going to go in a dramatic way especially when the music stopped, then I remembered it was you that made it (too much of a sweetheart to let anything happen to her characters) ^^ I hope to see even better stuff from you in the future, make us proud bossu! ^^ |
Aug 7, 2016 8:39 AM
#75
Just finished it! Music was on point! I really enjoyed the main screen music, pure piano bliss As many others have mentioned, it was short, but despite that I hope to see more installments of the VN! mmm if I had to point out one thing, it would be the hovering sound when you hover the mouse of the main screen options; the sharp noise kind of interrupts the nice piano, so maybe more subtle or like less sharp would be nice? But that's a personal opinion, so I bet others might think its fine >.< Oh I also had one question regarding one of the lines! when male student 2 says: "She looks nice :)", does he mean that Sophie is cute? or like pretty? But yep that's all i have to say/ask! Good luck in creating further installments of the vn! |
Aug 8, 2016 3:11 AM
#76
Kishmare said: No problem, you helped me big time, so I really appreciate this :>Kishmare said: Awesome VN Monia!! The art and music are perfectt Just some grammar issues I found... (sorry to be so nit picky >w<) And grammar corrections are welcome, I will try my best to avoid them in any upcoming releases. Here are my replies to the mistakes you referred to:- :) You could write "There a tons of middle-class people who live a more normal life too." Or "There a tons of middle-class people who live more normal lives too." I am not sure why the "are" should be omitted, but I corrected the extra "a" in my current script, nice find Gah sorry about the "are" it was 4 am, so I kind of missed some letters >w< |
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Aug 8, 2016 3:12 AM
#77
Vaenny said: Yes, though I wouldn't mind getting early recognition if possible :>SweetMonia said: Perhaps when it's done then. Looking forward to the full build!Vaenny said: SweetMonia said: Vaenny said: No, it is not a full visual novel, though I didn't think I should do anything like that. :>Quick question: have you recorded the game info at VNDB yet? Why not? It seems like a good idea. It's good publicity, at least. |
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Aug 8, 2016 3:14 AM
#78
KouKunxX said: Nice! Someone else has liked the music of the game. Glad you liked my characters too :3I finished it, I loved the music choice, and the characters were super cute It was short, but I expected it to be (since you were the only one working on it) ^^ there were a few grammar mistakes, though not going to point them out since I'm pretty sure someone already did ^^ Other than that, I really liked it I thought it was going to go in a dramatic way especially when the music stopped, then I remembered it was you that made it (too much of a sweetheart to let anything happen to her characters) ^^ I hope to see even better stuff from you in the future, make us proud bossu! ^^ I will try to make longer skits in the future, but that will take some time :) Okay~ Ahaha~ Yes, I won't do horrible things to my characters, not in a certain way at least ^^ I hope so too, and thank you for the encouragement, it means a lot to me... *Bows* |
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Aug 8, 2016 3:18 AM
#79
neogalactic54 said: Merci, it makes me happy everyone mention that they like the music, it is one of the good things about creating a visual novel :3Just finished it! Music was on point! I really enjoyed the main screen music, pure piano bliss As many others have mentioned, it was short, but despite that I hope to see more installments of the VN! mmm if I had to point out one thing, it would be the hovering sound when you hover the mouse of the main screen options; the sharp noise kind of interrupts the nice piano, so maybe more subtle or like less sharp would be nice? But that's a personal opinion, so I bet others might think its fine >.< Oh I also had one question regarding one of the lines! when male student 2 says: "She looks nice :)", does he mean that Sophie is cute? or like pretty? But yep that's all i have to say/ask! Good luck in creating further installments of the vn! You are the first one on MAL to comment on that peace, I quite like it, it fits the theme of the game a lot. I hope you like my upcoming installment, which are going to be much better ^^ I agree with you with that, I made it less sharp than it originally was, but it looks like it still annoyed some people, I will see if I can do something about this. Yes it means she looks beautiful, it is one of the grammar mistake pointed out above Merci for your useful feedback neogalactic! I like your Hifumi avvy by the way :3 |
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Aug 8, 2016 7:05 AM
#80
SweetMonia said: Kishmare said: No problem, you helped me big time, so I really appreciate this :>Kishmare said: Awesome VN Monia!! The art and music are perfectt Just some grammar issues I found... (sorry to be so nit picky >w<) And grammar corrections are welcome, I will try my best to avoid them in any upcoming releases. Here are my replies to the mistakes you referred to:- :) You could write "There a tons of middle-class people who live a more normal life too." Or "There a tons of middle-class people who live more normal lives too." I am not sure why the "are" should be omitted, but I corrected the extra "a" in my current script, nice find Gah sorry about the "are" it was 4 am, so I kind of missed some letters >w< Just ask for it if you need any help, everyone in this amazing club is super friendly and helpful. Good luck with the next part of the VN. ^u^/ |
Aug 8, 2016 9:32 AM
#81
SweetMonia said: neogalactic54 said: Merci, it makes me happy everyone mention that they like the music, it is one of the good things about creating a visual novel :3Just finished it! Music was on point! I really enjoyed the main screen music, pure piano bliss As many others have mentioned, it was short, but despite that I hope to see more installments of the VN! mmm if I had to point out one thing, it would be the hovering sound when you hover the mouse of the main screen options; the sharp noise kind of interrupts the nice piano, so maybe more subtle or like less sharp would be nice? But that's a personal opinion, so I bet others might think its fine >.< Oh I also had one question regarding one of the lines! when male student 2 says: "She looks nice :)", does he mean that Sophie is cute? or like pretty? But yep that's all i have to say/ask! Good luck in creating further installments of the vn! You are the first one on MAL to comment on that peace, I quite like it, it fits the theme of the game a lot. I hope you like my upcoming installment, which are going to be much better ^^ I agree with you with that, I made it less sharp than it originally was, but it looks like it still annoyed some people, I will see if I can do something about this. Yes it means she looks beautiful, it is one of the grammar mistake pointed out above Merci for your useful feedback neogalactic! I like your Hifumi avvy by the way :3 Good luck with the further installments! Thanks for the compliment :D I like your you-chan avvy too! |
Aug 8, 2016 7:40 PM
#82
all done. i like it, it's a bit short, but you already no that. |
Aug 9, 2016 2:59 AM
#83
neogalactic54 said: Thank you! :3SweetMonia said: neogalactic54 said: Just finished it! Music was on point! I really enjoyed the main screen music, pure piano bliss As many others have mentioned, it was short, but despite that I hope to see more installments of the VN! mmm if I had to point out one thing, it would be the hovering sound when you hover the mouse of the main screen options; the sharp noise kind of interrupts the nice piano, so maybe more subtle or like less sharp would be nice? But that's a personal opinion, so I bet others might think its fine >.< Oh I also had one question regarding one of the lines! when male student 2 says: "She looks nice :)", does he mean that Sophie is cute? or like pretty? But yep that's all i have to say/ask! Good luck in creating further installments of the vn! You are the first one on MAL to comment on that peace, I quite like it, it fits the theme of the game a lot. I hope you like my upcoming installment, which are going to be much better ^^ I agree with you with that, I made it less sharp than it originally was, but it looks like it still annoyed some people, I will see if I can do something about this. Yes it means she looks beautiful, it is one of the grammar mistake pointed out above Merci for your useful feedback neogalactic! I like your Hifumi avvy by the way :3 Good luck with the further installments! Thanks for the compliment :D I like your you-chan avvy too! |
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Aug 9, 2016 2:59 AM
#84
Kishmare said: Will do! ^^SweetMonia said: Kishmare said: Kishmare said: Awesome VN Monia!! The art and music are perfectt Just some grammar issues I found... (sorry to be so nit picky >w<) And grammar corrections are welcome, I will try my best to avoid them in any upcoming releases. Here are my replies to the mistakes you referred to:- :) You could write "There a tons of middle-class people who live a more normal life too." Or "There a tons of middle-class people who live more normal lives too." I am not sure why the "are" should be omitted, but I corrected the extra "a" in my current script, nice find Gah sorry about the "are" it was 4 am, so I kind of missed some letters >w< Just ask for it if you need any help, everyone in this amazing club is super friendly and helpful. Good luck with the next part of the VN. ^u^/ And, I am glad you are enjoying my café, it makes me happy :) |
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Aug 9, 2016 3:00 AM
#85
jimanator said: Good, anything you liked in particular in it? :>all done. i like it, it's a bit short, but you already no that. |
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Aug 9, 2016 9:03 AM
#86
@sweetmonia it was kind of funny. |
Aug 22, 2016 2:55 PM
#87
Aug 22, 2016 8:48 PM
#88
EndofSummer said: Thank you so much! I hope you like it when you do, please post your thoughts here, I would love to read them :3you made your own video game. that's so cool. looks really good. will play it when I have the chance. looks really good. |
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Aug 31, 2016 5:22 AM
#89
Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! |
Sep 1, 2016 3:20 AM
#90
VariFox said: Thank you so much! Comments like that makes me glad I started this whole things. ^^Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! Yes, I drew everything myself, I surely plan to make them even better eventually, but I need to establish the world & story first ^^ The eyes are easy if you know they should be like, art is full of things like that:- Simple but not easy to replicate. As long as you keep trying with them, it will work out with you. :D |
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Sep 1, 2016 3:28 AM
#91
Should have made it UWP Looks great, will download and try it, and perhaps give my feedback after~ |
Sep 1, 2016 5:20 AM
#92
SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Thank you so much! Comments like that makes me glad I started this whole things. ^^Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! Yes, I drew everything myself, I surely plan to make them even better eventually, but I need to establish the world & story first ^^ The eyes are easy if you know they should be like, art is full of things like that:- Simple but not easy to replicate. As long as you keep trying with them, it will work out with you. :D Great thanks. I usually spend an hour or two everyday practicing different parts of art (anatomy, hair, etc.) and I've decided to keep a journal of my studies instead of just throwing away the piece of paper I draw on every day. As for the world and story, I'm sure you'll have no trouble with that. In fact, along with character design, those are probably the most fun parts about creating a visual novel (in my opinion anyways). Thanks again and I'm really excited to see more from you and this project. |
Sep 1, 2016 12:49 PM
#93
Well this is the first VN that I played >_< And I have to say that I liked it :D Although it felt ..ooh something new and ended pretty quickly , I kept wondering..is this a game or just a VN and you just need to read stuff? *noob question ;w;* The music was nice but I read some people could change it? How did that happen? Sprites could ofcourse do better reactions but still kudos! :D Let the grammar stuff be ignored, I liked the story so far, It was easy to follow :D SO overall it was fun \m/ |
Sep 1, 2016 9:27 PM
#94
Haruka said: UWP?Should have made it UWP Looks great, will download and try it, and perhaps give my feedback after~ Okay, take your time Haruka. Port here whenever you have a feedback for it ^^ |
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Sep 2, 2016 5:31 AM
#95
VariFox said: Yes, keeping such a journal can help, an hour & two can be enough, but you may need more to improve faster. Depending how you study anatomy~SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! Yes, I drew everything myself, I surely plan to make them even better eventually, but I need to establish the world & story first ^^ The eyes are easy if you know they should be like, art is full of things like that:- Simple but not easy to replicate. As long as you keep trying with them, it will work out with you. :D Great thanks. I usually spend an hour or two everyday practicing different parts of art (anatomy, hair, etc.) and I've decided to keep a journal of my studies instead of just throwing away the piece of paper I draw on every day. As for the world and story, I'm sure you'll have no trouble with that. In fact, along with character design, those are probably the most fun parts about creating a visual novel (in my opinion anyways). Thanks again and I'm really excited to see more from you and this project. That's indeed some of the best part about it, especially the characters design part, it got me to learn things I never thought about too.. And I will do my best to make a better installment next time. I hope to see you around then. ^^ |
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Sep 2, 2016 5:33 AM
#96
Bhavik_elric90 said: I am happy my visual novel was your first, sorry if it was short, that was done on purpose to make sure I learn the ropes. The next one will be longer. Well this is the first VN that I played >_< And I have to say that I liked it :D Although it felt ..ooh something new and ended pretty quickly , I kept wondering..is this a game or just a VN and you just need to read stuff? *noob question ;w;* The music was nice but I read some people could change it? How did that happen? Sprites could ofcourse do better reactions but still kudos! :D Let the grammar stuff be ignored, I liked the story so far, It was easy to follow :D SO overall it was fun \m/ Yes, in visual novel, you read the text & advance the story usually, most visual novels contain choices as well. Change the music? I don't think that's possible, unless I did that myself. I will try to improve on these two just in case. I will stick to the current formula from now on, while making things better of course. Thank you for reading Lolita Caramel, and I hope to see you around next time. ^^ |
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Sep 2, 2016 5:40 AM
#97
SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Yes, keeping such a journal can help, an hour & two can be enough, but you may need more to improve faster. Depending how you study anatomy~SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Thank you so much! Comments like that makes me glad I started this whole things. ^^Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! Yes, I drew everything myself, I surely plan to make them even better eventually, but I need to establish the world & story first ^^ The eyes are easy if you know they should be like, art is full of things like that:- Simple but not easy to replicate. As long as you keep trying with them, it will work out with you. :D Great thanks. I usually spend an hour or two everyday practicing different parts of art (anatomy, hair, etc.) and I've decided to keep a journal of my studies instead of just throwing away the piece of paper I draw on every day. As for the world and story, I'm sure you'll have no trouble with that. In fact, along with character design, those are probably the most fun parts about creating a visual novel (in my opinion anyways). Thanks again and I'm really excited to see more from you and this project. That's indeed some of the best part about it, especially the characters design part, it got me to learn things I never thought about too.. And I will do my best to make a better installment next time. I hope to see you around then. ^^ Awesome, thanks for the advice. I'll be looking forward to the next installment. Are you just going to post an announcement here when it releases or what? |
Sep 2, 2016 5:56 AM
#98
VariFox said: You're welcome! I will announce it here, you can also follow me on Twitter or subscribe to the newsletter. :)SweetMonia said: VariFox said: SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Thank you so much! Comments like that makes me glad I started this whole things. ^^Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! Yes, I drew everything myself, I surely plan to make them even better eventually, but I need to establish the world & story first ^^ The eyes are easy if you know they should be like, art is full of things like that:- Simple but not easy to replicate. As long as you keep trying with them, it will work out with you. :D Great thanks. I usually spend an hour or two everyday practicing different parts of art (anatomy, hair, etc.) and I've decided to keep a journal of my studies instead of just throwing away the piece of paper I draw on every day. As for the world and story, I'm sure you'll have no trouble with that. In fact, along with character design, those are probably the most fun parts about creating a visual novel (in my opinion anyways). Thanks again and I'm really excited to see more from you and this project. That's indeed some of the best part about it, especially the characters design part, it got me to learn things I never thought about too.. And I will do my best to make a better installment next time. I hope to see you around then. ^^ Awesome, thanks for the advice. I'll be looking forward to the next installment. Are you just going to post an announcement here when it releases or what? |
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Sep 2, 2016 5:59 AM
#99
SweetMonia said: VariFox said: You're welcome! I will announce it here, you can also follow me on Twitter or subscribe to the newsletter. :)SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Yes, keeping such a journal can help, an hour & two can be enough, but you may need more to improve faster. Depending how you study anatomy~SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Thank you so much! Comments like that makes me glad I started this whole things. ^^Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! Yes, I drew everything myself, I surely plan to make them even better eventually, but I need to establish the world & story first ^^ The eyes are easy if you know they should be like, art is full of things like that:- Simple but not easy to replicate. As long as you keep trying with them, it will work out with you. :D Great thanks. I usually spend an hour or two everyday practicing different parts of art (anatomy, hair, etc.) and I've decided to keep a journal of my studies instead of just throwing away the piece of paper I draw on every day. As for the world and story, I'm sure you'll have no trouble with that. In fact, along with character design, those are probably the most fun parts about creating a visual novel (in my opinion anyways). Thanks again and I'm really excited to see more from you and this project. That's indeed some of the best part about it, especially the characters design part, it got me to learn things I never thought about too.. And I will do my best to make a better installment next time. I hope to see you around then. ^^ Awesome, thanks for the advice. I'll be looking forward to the next installment. Are you just going to post an announcement here when it releases or what? Whoa, you've got a crazy amount of media outlets. Pretty cool. Can you send me the link to the newsletter? I'm a degenerate and can't find it myself lol |
Sep 2, 2016 6:09 AM
#100
VariFox said: mhmm ^^SweetMonia said: VariFox said: SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Yes, keeping such a journal can help, an hour & two can be enough, but you may need more to improve faster. Depending how you study anatomy~SweetMonia said: VariFox said: Thank you so much! Comments like that makes me glad I started this whole things. ^^Dude this seriously is friggin cool. Not even lying. I'm not one for visual novels but this is really REALLY cool. Did you draw the sprites yourself? I'm a learning graphic artist but I'm having trouble understanding (is this ironic? No clue) how to draw the eyes. I've been studying proportions and different styles, but these are great drawings if you did do them. I definitely see promise if you do choose to improve upon this! Yes, I drew everything myself, I surely plan to make them even better eventually, but I need to establish the world & story first ^^ The eyes are easy if you know they should be like, art is full of things like that:- Simple but not easy to replicate. As long as you keep trying with them, it will work out with you. :D Great thanks. I usually spend an hour or two everyday practicing different parts of art (anatomy, hair, etc.) and I've decided to keep a journal of my studies instead of just throwing away the piece of paper I draw on every day. As for the world and story, I'm sure you'll have no trouble with that. In fact, along with character design, those are probably the most fun parts about creating a visual novel (in my opinion anyways). Thanks again and I'm really excited to see more from you and this project. That's indeed some of the best part about it, especially the characters design part, it got me to learn things I never thought about too.. And I will do my best to make a better installment next time. I hope to see you around then. ^^ Awesome, thanks for the advice. I'll be looking forward to the next installment. Are you just going to post an announcement here when it releases or what? Whoa, you've got a crazy amount of media outlets. Pretty cool. Can you send me the link to the newsletter? I'm a degenerate and can't find it myself lol You can find the form at the very bottom of the following page, enter your E-mail and you will get a confirmation letter, once you confirm subscription, you are up to receive all updates:- ^^ http://SweetMonia.com/Sweet-Anime-Blog/lolita-caramel-first-skit-is-now-available-download-it-for-free |
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